On August 6th through the tenth the Alhelali family went on vacation to Branson Missouri .They saw lots of beautiful sites such as Speedy Racing Tracks , as they pulled up the mother and daughter fastly ran to the Hyland Swig Drop this is a 500 foot air drop , you are only connected to 5 wires one around your waist and stomach and 2 around your legs and 1 to pull to unattach the the string to make them drop or as I should say fly , while they scream with excitement the daughter nervously unattaches the wire from the pole with a yank at the wire . Them was screaming and the daughter was laughing. I think this was one of their moments to never forget .
That sounds fun! I loved the detail.
ReplyDeleteInstead of them you should say they. I think there should have been more detail about what they did on the trip. Sounds like an enjoyable time, just need to explain what is it that they were doing..
ReplyDeleteThat sounds like it was a lot of fun and very intresting.
ReplyDeleteYou used great detail but the last 2 sentences had some errors which made is sound alittle of and didnt make lots of sense. over all great job, and that sounds like lots of fun
ReplyDeleteLove the detail you gave. Great job!!!! :)
ReplyDeletegood job on those sentences.
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