I was so mad so, me and him just start going off on each other and start fighting because he cursed me out so I went over to him and punched him and we just start fighting for real .And perhaps my dad came an the living room and said " what are y'all doing" and so we stop fighting and I said "man lamont always starting something cause he going to get mad at me because i went off on him for cracking me phone" ..
Then, my daddy said " well y'all need to straighten up and Jonese you go call your mama and tell her that your phone crack make sure you tell her the real story an don't lie.So,I'm like "Ok"so I'm telling her and she going to say "O well that's your fault for not having a case on the phone but,I'll get your screen fix because you do have insurance on your phone".
But,even though my mama told me some good information i still was kinda mad still cause i still had to wait for the people to shift me the phone to me an i give them my crack phone .I was so quiet in the house that u wouldn't even know that i was in the house because of my phone.I didn't talk to nobody not even my daddy (even though he didn't do nothing ) .I just wasn't an the mood to talk that day .
I'm like "man i can't stand people sometimes in my head "
perhaps, you can use better grammar, other than that it's good
ReplyDeletefix your grammar
ReplyDeletenot trying to be rude
ReplyDeletethis a good story but the grammer is a little off a bit other than that its PRETTY cool i guess about a phone breaking because of a dance party
ReplyDeletethe story is okay and well told. But the story needs better grammar.
ReplyDeleteI like how you had a lot of detail, but your grammar was a little off and the newscast was suppose to be in 3rd person, not 1st person.
ReplyDeleteNot trying to be rude but you need to check your grammer next time.
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ReplyDeleteI like your writing format
ReplyDeleteDid your cousin do it on purpose?
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