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Wednesday, October 1, 2014
The 5 Grade Battle
In 5th grade, me and my friend Scott got in trouble because both of us cused on accident .{were on the computers and it was time to go outside and we didn't want to go we wanted to stay on the the computers. so these girls came over and logged us out before we could save our progress}. so my teacher talked about it while everyone else was at the feild having recess. when we got done talking about how wrong it is to cuuse .I saw a young little boy crying and lots of blood comin out of his face.a friend told me what happened and it was not good he had got into a fight with Kieren iverng and lost badly.THE END
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please take my name out of this article
ReplyDeleteReally funny! Lol. One thing is spelling. There are some words that are mis spelled .
ReplyDeleteI agree with you about that
Deleteyou need to use capitalization in Ur writing ,but overall it was funny
ReplyDeleteLOL yea i agree but nice new cast
ReplyDeleteGood story get the story right first i didnt cry first of all and take my name out
ReplyDeleteGood Story, but one thing I would like to say is that you have a lot of personal words like me,i,we, and others. Another thing is capitalization , there are a lot of words that should be capitalized that are not ! Also spelling you misspelled a couple of things, other then that you did good !
ReplyDeleteGood story but a lot of grammar problems
ReplyDeleteGood story but a lot of grammar problems
ReplyDeleteFunny but try working on spelling and overall it's good
ReplyDeletegood job but check spelling and add more detail
ReplyDeleteThat was funny ,but next time make sure you spell the words right and capitalization !!!!
ReplyDeleteLots of spelling errors and also a punctuation error with the parenthesis
ReplyDeletewhat does us cussing have anything to do with the fight?but that was a good time
ReplyDeleteNice but remember that we are using 3rd person not first.
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ReplyDeleteit was good but remember to capatilize the first letter and to use first person and the ending doesn't have to do wht your story is about
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