It was around 12:30 in the afternoon, on a hot summer day in july. There were two cars coming from two different directions, one of the cars was speeding and swerved into the other lane and SMACKED!! into the other car . All you hear is “SkURT!!!”” BANG!!!”, flames started erupting from one of the cars. People started getting out of their cars to try and help this older lady out of the burning car, she was yelling “HELP , HELP’’!!. The man that was speeding was stuck in his car too, but nobody was trying to help him get out. They focusing on getting the lady out of the car. People was yelling “ CALL 911 , CALL 911!!, as they was trying to get her out, you can see her body giving up, her head tilt forward on the steering wheel and she wasn’t yelling anymore.
The sirens got closer and closer. When they finally got there , the firemen was yelling “MOVE, MOVE, GET BACK”. Then a big force of water hit the car and got the fire out. The firemen got the car door opened and the ambulance people pulled the lady out and put a blanket over her body. Then they opened the man car door and took him to the hospital. This was a tragic accident that took an innocent lady life in a matter of seconds.
:O! Tragic story mam. I like the emotion you made the readers feel. It put me to the edge of my seat!!!
ReplyDeleteThis is really good!! I liked how you made some words bold. When you said the lady's body was giving up it made me want to read more! Good job!!
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