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Friday, October 17, 2014

Ion Get Tired

Marcus Burns
Group 4
10-16-14




          Unfair treatment from parents is not the answer.  One day a young handsome boy was sleeping in the cloud soft bed. A man yelled “ Come here “ his voice sounded as scratchy as the walls, the boy said “huh?’ The man had wanted him to cut the the grass . This man was his dad and the interrupted boy was Marcus’s sleep. Marcus had to get up and cut the tall grass.
           Another example of unfair treatment is when Marcus had football practice his dad dropped him off and went to go by himself   something to eat and drink . So when Marcus’s dad had returned. Marcus’s practice was over Marcus asked can I get something to drink he said no I’m trying to get home , even though Marcus had been at practice for two hours. Thats the day Marcus Found out the man was mean as a grinch.

         I just want to let you know you know unfair treatment isn’t right. Everyone should be treated fair, treat them at they were you.

2 comments:

  1. Handsome? lol. I think you did good with the dialog but need to explain the issue more.

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  2. you might need to go back through and check your grammar. Also, your story is pretty small. But, you did okay other than that.

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