iPhone has just released a two brand new phones called the "iPhone 6" & the "iPhone 6 Plus". We have been hearing that iPhone 6 is perfectly fine but that's not the case with the iPhone 6 plus. At HC blogs we have been hearing that the iPhone 6 plus is bending in peoples pockets. At first we didn't have any evidence whats so ever but, now we do. I have witnessed this tragic event for iPhone 6 plus users. Apple has been working on getting the "sleek & slim" look. But have they gone to far? The aluminum is not supported enough for it to stay strait. I have seen it and it doesn't require much force to bend it. Apple is trying to make a cover-up for it but most people don't believe in it. That is it for "Apple News" now Kevin will be giving you the highlights of yesterdays game.
Really good reporting my friend. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteGood job you had some nice dialogue and nice story.
ReplyDeleteNice job! Just remember to keep first person out of the report!
ReplyDeleteI agree, a newscast shouldn't be in first person. This is really good, though! I didn't even know that!
DeleteGood newscast as i read it ,it kinda sounded like someone was telling me the story.
ReplyDeleteI agree, because it felt like I was actually watching the news.
Deletethat was really great. but remember to stay out of first person and make it a little longer
ReplyDeleteGood job Haris! but like megan said keep it out of 1st person point of view. but you used great detail
ReplyDeletei Agree but you shouldn't write in first person
ReplyDeletegreat job i like how you are informing abut a nationwide problem but i agree don't use 1st person.
ReplyDeletenice job! harris
ReplyDeleteWas good, made me visualize the phone bending.
ReplyDeletegood job on adding lots of details.
ReplyDeleteI like how u said "now heres kevin.."
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