In June of 2014 around 11:00 a.m. there was a accident on the highway. The two cars were driving in two different lanes side by side. The blue car on the left lost control of the wheel and swerved into the other car.When they crashed into each other the blue car flipped on its side. With the most excruciating sound. ‘BANG’’. Pieces of the car flew all around the highway.Cars in front and behind the crash stopped immediatly so they did'nt get hit in the crash. Cars on the oppisite side on the highway slowed down to see the horrific accident. Some people even getting out of their cars to see what happened. And a lot of people calling 911. ‘’There's been a car accident.’’ or ‘’ I think someones hurt.’’ The police/ambulance/fire truck arrived within 5 to 7 minutes. The firemen running towards the crash stepping over all the pieces of the cars. And screaming ‘’MOVE GET BACK’’ to the people standing outside their cars. The police instructing people to get back in their cars,so they don’t get hurt.And the paramedics rushing to crash to help the drivers. The traffic slowly started to build on the highway ,so police had to send people a different route Thankfully nobody was hurt in the accident.
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